CINQUAINS FOR dverse FORM FOR ALL
STORMY WEATHER
Cloudy
Chance of teardrops
Possibility of thunder
Hurricanes in season these days
Mood swings
MAGIC MAN
Vision
No magician
Healed the sick; fed the poor
If we follow in his footsteps
Peace reigns
© 2013 Amy Barlow Liberatore/Sharp Little Pencil
Tony at dverse presented the weekly “form for all.” I had written some a long while back for Real Toads, but Tony’s explanation of the guidelines – to write with intention; to place meaningful words at the end of a line, rather than a transitional word or hyphenation that makes the 2-4-6-8-2 syllable scheme add up mathematically… these helped me develop a new appreciation of the Cinquain. I hope my poems reflect his guidance!
These will also pop up in the scrolling poetry jam at Poets United, where I always try to be in my best “form.”
Also, today (March 14) would have been the 90th birthday of my mother, Charlotte. I miss her so.
Peace, Amy
Mar 15, 2013 @ 00:57:26
Nice work! I especially like the first one. Sending good thoughts to you on your mother’s birthday.
Mar 15, 2013 @ 01:02:08
Very lovely, Amy. Ditto on what Linda Hatton wrote above – good thoughts for you!
Mar 15, 2013 @ 02:34:28
Both are cool ~ isn’t it ace when someone explains something to you in a way you can understand and work with … such people re truly inspiring. Well done Amy and well done Tony for being that inspiration
Mar 15, 2013 @ 03:46:50
This is a great form for poetry (with a bite). I am very tempted to try it as you made it look so good.
Mar 15, 2013 @ 04:50:50
The first one was really good…
Mar 15, 2013 @ 05:07:53
The second poem : Christianity in a nutshell.
I relate to the loss of your mom; condolences, even 2 decades later.
Mar 15, 2013 @ 05:27:43
ha. if
we follow…how
many do you know that
really do?
the first one made me think of cloudy w a chance of meatballs initially…i think i need more coffee…smiles…
Mar 15, 2013 @ 05:50:54
l liked the comparison of mood swings to hurricanes in your first one; and the second one is just perfect, especially for lent! Well composed cinquains, Amy.
Mar 15, 2013 @ 07:47:16
Love the mood swings likened to hurricanes. You did great here, Amy. Thinking of you on this special day.
Mar 15, 2013 @ 07:52:08
oh, do love the first one… and how you used tears in the storm… hopefully He’ll wipe them dry
Mar 15, 2013 @ 08:15:17
Great pieces, and thanks for the Cinquain primer.
Mar 15, 2013 @ 08:43:42
You did good! I like them both alot, but lean toward the secnd one as my favorite!
Mar 15, 2013 @ 09:02:51
Amy, you are in beautiful form! I loved both of these, especially the first one really spoke to my heart. Thank you. Love~Sara v
Mar 15, 2013 @ 09:19:40
I aspire to the clarity and fullness you achieve with every piece you write, Amy. SO VERY GOOD.
Mar 15, 2013 @ 09:39:35
You’ve aced the form Amy. So glad I could help you to see it in a new light. The first one has me thinking about your daughter; the second has me fist-pumping and yelling Amen – quietly
Mar 15, 2013 @ 11:17:54
Your second poem captured love in action. I’ll think on that for a while and enjoy.
Mar 15, 2013 @ 12:16:54
nice..i like the storm mood in the first one and vision instead of magician…so cool….would’ve loved to walk with him just for a day…but then..i do…daily…smiles
Mar 15, 2013 @ 13:15:35
Wonderful…complete with a lovely msg
Mar 15, 2013 @ 15:06:58
The first one is so very lovely – it just sings along. And the second offers a wonderfully expressed vision of hope.
Mar 15, 2013 @ 15:35:59
Stormy weather – yes people definately have weather too!
Mar 15, 2013 @ 16:10:05
Hmmm, the Magic man is interestingly vague. Were the miracles exaggerations so the ethics of kindness were easier to spread?
Mood swings — oh how tough those must be — for everyone!
Fun writes.
Mar 15, 2013 @ 19:50:06
Great job Amy! Oh, I hope you have magic memories of you Mom!
Yes, stormy weather is a great way to describe the pain~
Mar 16, 2013 @ 10:40:36
Cinquains… one of the few poetry forms that makes sense to me, that I can work with… and you did it so very well! I loved both of these!
Mar 16, 2013 @ 10:42:19
Stormy Weather… that’s me! Just like Spring season here in Texas, I am all over the place these days, trying hard to focus on the sunshine!