Blue Babe
Funk-flattened by that man,
the one who stole her whole,
heart, soul… grassy knoll.
Blue, blank, busted,
burnt by a formerly formidable passion
that now passes for bitter brittleness.
Lost love takes the shape of
a long tall martini, in her limp hands,
as she holds up her part of the bar,
awaiting her next mistake.
© 2012 Amy Barlow Liberatore/Sharp Little Pencil
For Trifecta, use the word “blue” in a 33-333 poem as an adjective meaning melancholy… Been there, done him…
Also at my poetic watering hole, Poets United. Peace, Amy
Sharp Little Pencil 
leesis
my goodness Amy you are ridiculously good 🙂
Debbie
Oh my . . .your word choices were incredible here! Loved it!
vivinfrance
When I think of you, I think of joy, humour, feistiness. The idea of a blue you is painful, and I hope it doesn’t happen too often.
Diane Turner
I really love this piece. The alliteration is subtle and effective, the images sensory and beautiful. Excellent writing.
kkkkaty
Thanks, Amy, I am tickled you are reminded of the first song you sang…kkkkaty….a vintage song ..also what the crowd yelled at Barbra Streisand when she was a lefty student in the movie “The Way We Were”……I’m glad I adopted it..as for your Blues and martini Trifecta, it has a bite to it I really like….will have to try my hand at this form of poetry 😉
Annabelle
There’s a powerful sense of despair to that last line — nicely done.
on thehomefrontandbeyond
that is real life you are describing here
The Gal Herself
I love that “Lost love takes the shape of a long, tall martini.” She’s not just drinking to dull the pain (you can do that with beer), she’s fortifying herself, too. A lovely detail!
Marie
“awaiting her next mistake” so true and gosh I wish I could avoid them sometimes!
Sara V
Amy, you so amaze me. You also did a poem to the prompt at poetry jam–“mistakes”
Love that last stanza “Lost love takes the shape of a long tall martini, in her limp hands, as she holds up her part of the bar, awaiting her next mistake”
Rock on!
HaikuWater
Powerful, pointed blues here. Brittle, brutal and hang on tight literate!
Salem Archer Anderson {gray daisies}
I LOVE this! Great flow and rhythm!
Christine
Ohhh, I love those last two stanzas. What a fantastic image.
El Guapo
Again, it’s the cadences and rhythm that get me.
Love what you did with the story in this.
Imelda
Oh… now, she is really really blue. I hope she snaps out of it.
Lovely poem and response to the prompt.
jannatwrites
This entire poem was amazing. The phrasing, word choices, everything – made me wish I could come up poetry this brilliant. (I’m serious.)
Lance
I like how rough and mean and dark it begins then blossoms into something hopeful at the very end. Like going through a dark period but retaining your dignity and indentity.
The last line is self-aware as hell and this really strong.
well done
wordsandthoughtspjs
Amelita, this is really good!
Pamelita
trifectawriting
Thanks so much for linking up with Trifecta this week. Like the others, I loved your final stanza. Lost love taking the shape of a martini is just perfect. As is the idea of this woman holding up her end of the bar. It’s a rather masculine image, and I love that you’ve given it to this woman.
Great job with the prompt.
Polly Robinson
Wonderfully alliterative – simply fab
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brenda w
The initial repetition of the “ole” sound is fabulous, Amy. Words are at play. Fantastic write. There’s a piece at my place linked up to Trifecta. Take a look at it, give it a sing. It wouldn’t hurt my feelings if you came up with a second stanza…
Happy Friday!
kaykuala
A tinge of sadness on a love lost situation. Sometimes we are too distraught to learn from the first mistake and commit another! Nice write Amy!
Hank
Hannah Denski
Wow, nicely said – well, we learn from mistakes, eh? : )x
brian miller
awaiting her next mistake….dang…great closure on this…and you were able to encapsulate a lot in a few short stanzas…and emotive…well down….