Manly Men
There, he looked again,
right at me.
At my crotch, for God’s sake.
He’s at the table across from the bar
near the bathrooms.
Maybe he thinks I’m
“that way.”
Maybe the little queer
thinks he’ll score.
Who can blame him? I’m a stud.
I work out twice a week.
But God, he must
think I’m some kind of
perv.
Here he comes,
right over to the bar,
brazen little nancy boy.
I could buy him a few
drinks, get him out back
and beat the shi-
“Mister?” the young man says
softly.
“Your fly is open.”
He walks to the door,
greets some guy
They hug and grab a drink.
Maybe I should work out more.
© 2012 Amy Barlow Liberatore/Sharp Little Pencil
Kerry at Imaginary Garden With Real Toads requested we write poems from the first person point of view using a narrator whose unreliability becomes clear to the reader through the course of the narrative. Also, ABC Wednesday is up to M, and, as always, it’s up at my favorite LGBTQ-friendly cafe, Poets United.
Remember, never judge the book without reading it first. Or something like that. I’m so sick of homophobes, and this is an example of well-deserved ego deflation (and shrinkage!). Peace, Amy
Paula Scott Molokai Girl Studio
Loved it!!
That ‘love one another as I have loved you’ part is really hard for most to carry through with in daily life, isn’t it?
vivinfrance
Wow, Amy, you have gone for the jugular here! A clever use of the unreliable narrator.
Subhan Zein
That is extremely well done. Great stuff, Amy! 🙂
Subhan Zein
JInksy
But is the narrator unreliable? Sounds to me like they’d stick to their guns through thick and thin…But it demonstrates wonderfully that they shouldn’t take everything at face value. Well done.:)
brian miller
haha….this is pretty funny….and mens insecurities….ugh….i def dont mind giving out man hugs though and think nothing of it….
Hannah Gosselin
This is funny, Amy and also not at the same time..he he…there’s so much drama and anger that can get built up in people’s minds and half the time what they think’s going on is not even the real story. You captured this scene like a pro, Amy, Well done!!
Daydreamertoo
Haha… very clever. I agree with Hannah”s comment.. Some people are so full of their own importance. LOL
Loved this smack down …
Pearl Ketover Prilik
Amy – a incisive cut at all homophobes in an easily relatable form! That is what excellent writing can be all about ! That is what the sparkly gem is! Thoroughly enjoyed 🙂
ManicDdaily
Ha! Very funny. This is really clever. The mindset feels also a little intrigued/jealous. I’m sure that’s intended, but you’ve done is with some subtlety as well as humor. k.
ManicDdaily
ps – meant to say great humor! k.
Kerry O'Connor
Ah, yes! Self-perception vs Reality… The humour underlines a deeper social ill which needs to be examined: this unreasonable hatred of the gay community .
Mama Pajama
nice…well done on several levels. I was confused at first, until I got to the punchline!
on thehomefrontandbeyond
well done
kimnelsonwrites
While the ending gives us the irony and p-o-v, the last line masterfully gives us the underlying truth.
hedgewitch
This is just perfect, Amy–for the prompt, but also for the twisted logic of the ego-centric homophobe who is obviously subconsciously in such a different place that his over-compensating hostility attempts to disguise. The last line is priceless.
Sherry Blue Sky
Amy, you knocked this one right out of the park. I so enjoyed it. Big grin at the deflation of Super-Size-Me ego.
Roger Green
my wife says XYZ – eXamine Your Zipper! Funny stuff.
Helen
The world needs more poems like yours ….. brava!!
JInksy
Just goes to show, never judge a book by its cover! I’m not sure whether Google lost my earlier comment, or whether you decided to ignore it – though I can’t remember saying anything that would warrant that…
You’ve made a very valid point – there are far too many judgmental people in the world. 🙂
Richard Cody
Too funny!
Sarav
Amy, what a fun read! You really had me going there, sure of how the ending would be, and then what a perfect twist (in more than one way) Love it!!
Rajesh
Interesting twist.
purplepeninportland
Very well done.
Polly Robinson
heh-heh … love it 😉