Imaginary Garden With Real Toads gave us a form to work on, the Cinquain, sort of like haiku, but with a different syllabic structure (five lines; 2 – 4 – 6 – 8 – 2). Its inventor was the American poet Adelaide Crapsey. I wrote three: one funny, one environmental, and one about our praise service at church. Enjoy. If I didn’t make the deadline (often the case!), it will be shared on Real Toads’ Open Link Monday! Process notes below.
CINQUAINS FOR “REAL TOADS”
What’s In A Name?
Only
myself tonight
wondering how someone
who made this lovely form was named
Crapsey
Skeeter Davis Said It First*
Human
obsolescence
has been hastened by our
wanton disrespect for this gift,
our Earth.
Sing Hallelujah!
My church
Prayers are souldeep
Singing is loudrowdy
When the band starts in to jam, we
“pray twice”**
© 2013 Amy Barlow Liberatore/Sharp Little Pencil
NOTES: Cinquains ideally have a nature theme, similar to haiku; however, Americans generally disregard this, as is our nature. There are other suggested rules, and I didn’t bother with those either. See, I’m more of a “free-verse” kind of woman, and after years of songwriting, being constrained to any form makes me all twitchy. But for Real Toads, I did my best! Also on the right scrolling column of my poetic haven, Poets United.
* Skeeter Davis’ biggest hit was, “(Don’t They Know) It’s the End of the World?”
** Old saying: When you sing in church, you pray twice. Once with words and again with the joyful noise of rhythm and voices!
brian miller
ha. i really need to visit your church sometime…just saying…the first is funny. and made me smile…love the second one as it carries the message i come to expect from you….nicely done ma’am…
Sharp Little Pencil
Brian, thanks. And yeah, come to Madison. Our service rocks! Just like you, sir. How do you manage all your comments? You are Superman! Peace, Amy
Susie Clevenger (@wingsobutterfly)
Love it…a jammin’ church sounds great! All of the cinquain were great!
Susan
I especially like “sing hallelujah,” but all are good use of the form.
Misky
The first one made me laugh, which I needed this morning, so I declare it my favourite for today. Lovely work, Amy.
vivinfrance
All three good, but the Skeeter one is a strong message for all of us.
Laurie Kolp
Each is powerful, Amy. I just love your words.
Kerry O'Connor
I love ‘loudrowdy’ – such an excellent descriptive word!
Kim Nelson
I love your church cinquain, probably because I want to be there, hearing, feeling, loving it all!
http://www.kimnelsonwrites.com/2013/01/31/shadow-eater/
ManicDdaily
Very charming. k.
Sarav
Amy, I’m with you–free the verse! Also I love that saying that singing is praying twice–Amen! Wonderful set of poems 🙂
Helen
‘don’t they know it’s the end of the world’ ….. I love that song! Your cinquain verses are beautifully composed … praying twice? ~ cool.
Marian
very nice! *applause* (of the souldeep, loudrowdy variety)
Roger Green
like the singing one, but I was thinking the 1st one myself
Renee Espriu
I don’t believe I had heard of this one but I am all for free verse as you well know. I am leaving you a link to my recent post. Will always love what you do!
http://reneejustturtleflight.com/2013/02/06/
georgefloreswrite
Ditto to what Roger Green said 🙂
So glad to see you and your awesome poems are still around after my WordPress hiatus!
I HAVE A VOICE
wonderful encounter!
claudia
nice..your church sounds like a cool place..never heard that expression about praying twice when you sing..but so true..i like
El Guapo
Crapsey would be proud!
The restriction really does make you work to find the right words and phrases.
JodetteP
I like them all but “What’s In A Name?” is my favourite ❤ Made me smileee 🙂