Imaginary Garden With Real Toads gave us a form to work on, the Cinquain, sort of like haiku, but with a different syllabic structure (five lines; 2 – 4 – 6 – 8 – 2). Its inventor was the American poet Adelaide Crapsey. I wrote three: one funny, one environmental, and one about our praise service at church. Enjoy. If I didn’t make the deadline (often the case!), it will be shared on Real Toads’ Open Link Monday! Process notes below.
CINQUAINS FOR “REAL TOADS”
What’s In A Name?
wondering how someone
who made this lovely form was named
Skeeter Davis Said It First*
has been hastened by our
wanton disrespect for this gift,
Prayers are souldeep
Singing is loudrowdy
When the band starts in to jam, we
© 2013 Amy Barlow Liberatore/Sharp Little Pencil
NOTES: Cinquains ideally have a nature theme, similar to haiku; however, Americans generally disregard this, as is our nature. There are other suggested rules, and I didn’t bother with those either. See, I’m more of a “free-verse” kind of woman, and after years of songwriting, being constrained to any form makes me all twitchy. But for Real Toads, I did my best! Also on the right scrolling column of my poetic haven, Poets United.
* Skeeter Davis’ biggest hit was, “(Don’t They Know) It’s the End of the World?”
** Old saying: When you sing in church, you pray twice. Once with words and again with the joyful noise of rhythm and voices!
February 4, 2013 at 10:11 pm
ha. i really need to visit your church sometime…just saying…the first is funny. and made me smile…love the second one as it carries the message i come to expect from you….nicely done ma’am…
Sharp Little Pencil
February 4, 2013 at 10:34 pm
Brian, thanks. And yeah, come to Madison. Our service rocks! Just like you, sir. How do you manage all your comments? You are Superman! Peace, Amy
Susie Clevenger (@wingsobutterfly)
February 4, 2013 at 10:37 pm
Love it…a jammin’ church sounds great! All of the cinquain were great!
February 4, 2013 at 10:51 pm
I especially like “sing hallelujah,” but all are good use of the form.
February 5, 2013 at 5:06 am
The first one made me laugh, which I needed this morning, so I declare it my favourite for today. Lovely work, Amy.
February 5, 2013 at 5:32 am
All three good, but the Skeeter one is a strong message for all of us.
February 5, 2013 at 6:42 am
Each is powerful, Amy. I just love your words.
February 5, 2013 at 7:17 am
I love ‘loudrowdy’ – such an excellent descriptive word!
February 5, 2013 at 11:59 am
I love your church cinquain, probably because I want to be there, hearing, feeling, loving it all!
February 5, 2013 at 12:31 pm
Very charming. k.
February 5, 2013 at 2:11 pm
Amy, I’m with you–free the verse! Also I love that saying that singing is praying twice–Amen! Wonderful set of poems 🙂
February 5, 2013 at 2:28 pm
‘don’t they know it’s the end of the world’ ….. I love that song! Your cinquain verses are beautifully composed … praying twice? ~ cool.
February 5, 2013 at 2:31 pm
very nice! *applause* (of the souldeep, loudrowdy variety)
February 5, 2013 at 7:28 pm
like the singing one, but I was thinking the 1st one myself
February 5, 2013 at 8:36 pm
I don’t believe I had heard of this one but I am all for free verse as you well know. I am leaving you a link to my recent post. Will always love what you do!
February 5, 2013 at 11:54 pm
Ditto to what Roger Green said 🙂
So glad to see you and your awesome poems are still around after my WordPress hiatus!
I HAVE A VOICE
February 6, 2013 at 9:31 pm
February 7, 2013 at 11:33 am
nice..your church sounds like a cool place..never heard that expression about praying twice when you sing..but so true..i like
February 7, 2013 at 6:57 pm
Crapsey would be proud!
The restriction really does make you work to find the right words and phrases.
February 20, 2013 at 8:01 am
I like them all but “What’s In A Name?” is my favourite ❤ Made me smileee 🙂