CINQUAINS FOR dverse FORM FOR ALL
Chance of teardrops
Possibility of thunder
Hurricanes in season these days
Healed the sick; fed the poor
If we follow in his footsteps
© 2013 Amy Barlow Liberatore/Sharp Little Pencil
Tony at dverse presented the weekly “form for all.” I had written some a long while back for Real Toads, but Tony’s explanation of the guidelines – to write with intention; to place meaningful words at the end of a line, rather than a transitional word or hyphenation that makes the 2-4-6-8-2 syllable scheme add up mathematically… these helped me develop a new appreciation of the Cinquain. I hope my poems reflect his guidance!
These will also pop up in the scrolling poetry jam at Poets United, where I always try to be in my best “form.”
Also, today (March 14) would have been the 90th birthday of my mother, Charlotte. I miss her so.
Linda G Hatton
March 15, 2013 at 12:57 am
Nice work! I especially like the first one. Sending good thoughts to you on your mother’s birthday.
March 15, 2013 at 1:02 am
Very lovely, Amy. Ditto on what Linda Hatton wrote above – good thoughts for you!
March 15, 2013 at 2:34 am
Both are cool ~ isn’t it ace when someone explains something to you in a way you can understand and work with … such people re truly inspiring. Well done Amy and well done Tony for being that inspiration 🙂
March 15, 2013 at 3:46 am
This is a great form for poetry (with a bite). I am very tempted to try it as you made it look so good.
Björn Rudberg (brudberg)
March 15, 2013 at 4:50 am
The first one was really good… 🙂
March 15, 2013 at 5:07 am
The second poem : Christianity in a nutshell.
I relate to the loss of your mom; condolences, even 2 decades later.
March 15, 2013 at 5:27 am
many do you know that
the first one made me think of cloudy w a chance of meatballs initially…i think i need more coffee…smiles…
March 15, 2013 at 5:50 am
l liked the comparison of mood swings to hurricanes in your first one; and the second one is just perfect, especially for lent! Well composed cinquains, Amy.
March 15, 2013 at 7:47 am
Love the mood swings likened to hurricanes. You did great here, Amy. Thinking of you on this special day.
March 15, 2013 at 7:52 am
oh, do love the first one… and how you used tears in the storm… hopefully He’ll wipe them dry
March 15, 2013 at 8:15 am
Great pieces, and thanks for the Cinquain primer.
March 15, 2013 at 8:43 am
You did good! I like them both alot, but lean toward the secnd one as my favorite!
March 15, 2013 at 9:02 am
Amy, you are in beautiful form! I loved both of these, especially the first one really spoke to my heart. Thank you. Love~Sara v
March 15, 2013 at 9:19 am
I aspire to the clarity and fullness you achieve with every piece you write, Amy. SO VERY GOOD.
March 15, 2013 at 9:39 am
You’ve aced the form Amy. So glad I could help you to see it in a new light. The first one has me thinking about your daughter; the second has me fist-pumping and yelling Amen – quietly 🙂
March 15, 2013 at 11:17 am
Your second poem captured love in action. I’ll think on that for a while and enjoy.
March 15, 2013 at 12:16 pm
nice..i like the storm mood in the first one and vision instead of magician…so cool….would’ve loved to walk with him just for a day…but then..i do…daily…smiles
March 15, 2013 at 1:15 pm
Wonderful…complete with a lovely msg
March 15, 2013 at 3:06 pm
The first one is so very lovely – it just sings along. And the second offers a wonderfully expressed vision of hope.
March 15, 2013 at 3:35 pm
Stormy weather – yes people definately have weather too!
March 15, 2013 at 4:10 pm
Hmmm, the Magic man is interestingly vague. Were the miracles exaggerations so the ethics of kindness were easier to spread?
Mood swings — oh how tough those must be — for everyone!
March 15, 2013 at 7:50 pm
Great job Amy! Oh, I hope you have magic memories of you Mom! 😀
Yes, stormy weather is a great way to describe the pain~
Josie Two Shoes
March 16, 2013 at 10:40 am
Cinquains… one of the few poetry forms that makes sense to me, that I can work with… and you did it so very well! I loved both of these!
Josie Two Shoes
March 16, 2013 at 10:42 am
Stormy Weather… that’s me! Just like Spring season here in Texas, I am all over the place these days, trying hard to focus on the sunshine!