CINQUAINS FOR dverse FORM FOR ALL
STORMY WEATHER
Cloudy
Chance of teardrops
Possibility of thunder
Hurricanes in season these days
Mood swings
MAGIC MAN
Vision
No magician
Healed the sick; fed the poor
If we follow in his footsteps
Peace reigns
© 2013 Amy Barlow Liberatore/Sharp Little Pencil
Tony at dverse presented the weekly “form for all.” I had written some a long while back for Real Toads, but Tony’s explanation of the guidelines – to write with intention; to place meaningful words at the end of a line, rather than a transitional word or hyphenation that makes the 2-4-6-8-2 syllable scheme add up mathematically… these helped me develop a new appreciation of the Cinquain. I hope my poems reflect his guidance!
These will also pop up in the scrolling poetry jam at Poets United, where I always try to be in my best “form.”
Also, today (March 14) would have been the 90th birthday of my mother, Charlotte. I miss her so.
Peace, Amy
Linda G Hatton
Nice work! I especially like the first one. Sending good thoughts to you on your mother’s birthday.
georgefloreswrite
Very lovely, Amy. Ditto on what Linda Hatton wrote above – good thoughts for you!
Polly Robinson
Both are cool ~ isn’t it ace when someone explains something to you in a way you can understand and work with … such people re truly inspiring. Well done Amy and well done Tony for being that inspiration 🙂
oldegg
This is a great form for poetry (with a bite). I am very tempted to try it as you made it look so good.
Björn Rudberg (brudberg)
The first one was really good… 🙂
Roger Green
The second poem : Christianity in a nutshell.
I relate to the loss of your mom; condolences, even 2 decades later.
brian miller
ha. if
we follow…how
many do you know that
really do?
the first one made me think of cloudy w a chance of meatballs initially…i think i need more coffee…smiles…
Mary
l liked the comparison of mood swings to hurricanes in your first one; and the second one is just perfect, especially for lent! Well composed cinquains, Amy.
Laurie Kolp
Love the mood swings likened to hurricanes. You did great here, Amy. Thinking of you on this special day.
wolfsrosebud
oh, do love the first one… and how you used tears in the storm… hopefully He’ll wipe them dry
El Guapo
Great pieces, and thanks for the Cinquain primer.
charlesmashburn
You did good! I like them both alot, but lean toward the secnd one as my favorite!
SaraV
Amy, you are in beautiful form! I loved both of these, especially the first one really spoke to my heart. Thank you. Love~Sara v
Kim Nelson
I aspire to the clarity and fullness you achieve with every piece you write, Amy. SO VERY GOOD.
Tony
You’ve aced the form Amy. So glad I could help you to see it in a new light. The first one has me thinking about your daughter; the second has me fist-pumping and yelling Amen – quietly 🙂
eusebiaphilotes
Your second poem captured love in action. I’ll think on that for a while and enjoy.
claudia
nice..i like the storm mood in the first one and vision instead of magician…so cool….would’ve loved to walk with him just for a day…but then..i do…daily…smiles
anoveldiary
Wonderful…complete with a lovely msg
Margaret
The first one is so very lovely – it just sings along. And the second offers a wonderfully expressed vision of hope.
Rowan Taw
Stormy weather – yes people definately have weather too!
Sabio Lantz
Hmmm, the Magic man is interestingly vague. Were the miracles exaggerations so the ethics of kindness were easier to spread?
Mood swings — oh how tough those must be — for everyone!
Fun writes.
ellaedge
Great job Amy! Oh, I hope you have magic memories of you Mom! 😀
Yes, stormy weather is a great way to describe the pain~
Josie Two Shoes
Cinquains… one of the few poetry forms that makes sense to me, that I can work with… and you did it so very well! I loved both of these!
Josie Two Shoes
Stormy Weather… that’s me! Just like Spring season here in Texas, I am all over the place these days, trying hard to focus on the sunshine!