KELLY LUNES
Sad Girl
She lives in the past
Hindsight rules
Her head in the ‘coulds’
Tender Tummy
Gable scarfed cat food
in seconds
Wait, here comes… feed-back
Mornings With Mom
Gin bottles rinsed out
Coffee’s on
Time to wake her up
Tentative taps on
her closed door
Muffled confusion
Soon she will emerge
eyes squinting
hands, shaking and cold
Wrap them ‘round the mug
Warmth stops shakes
Caffeine soothes her pain
All Lunes © 2013 Amy Barlow Liberatore/Sharp Little Pencil
Three-quarters of the way through April’s Poem a Day for National Poetry Writing Month! Today, Grace (AKA Heaven) of Imaginary Garden With Real Toads asked for “lunes.” I chose the Kelly Lune form, an American haiku form based on syllables (one line of five, one line of three, last line of five; in a single stanza or multiples of same). The Collum Lune is based on number of words: Three, Five, Three; however, that form is for another day!
Thanks, Grace, for another lovely prompt from the Garden. Peace, Amy
Sharp Little Pencil 
Roger Green
Like, esp the first. ‘Could’ is a common disease.
Grace
Hindsight is good if we can turn that “could” to “can” ~ The second is funny, and the third weaving lunes portrayed the grim reality of dealing with a mother suffering from pain or challenges ~ It must have been tough on the children ~
Thanks for participating in RT Sunday Challenge ~
Sherry Blue Sky
I love these, especially the “could’s”.
elleceef
My favourite is the first with the line “Her head in the ‘coulds”, the second is cute, and the third serries – a sad story of a child’s challenge with Mum’s addiction,,, enjoyed them all
Sharp Little Pencil
TO ALL WHO COMMENTED: Thanks so much for your kind words. Yes, I coined “feedback’ (usually a musician’s term for mic squeals) when my friend Carolyn’s cat Spotty barfed on the rug. It’s funnier if you say it in a cat voice.
And could actually resulted from my oft-typed mistake, “cloud,” and boy, did it work. Accident or happenstance: Film at 11! AMY
Truedessa
sad girl her head in the “could’s” ..well done.
Mary
I was going to comment on the same phrase that Truedessa mentioned. “Head in the coulds” takes my breath away.
Susan
You do wonders with this form, but I especially identify with “feedback.”
Helen
All three … simply amazing! Mary is right ~ ‘head in the coulds’ blew me away.
vivinfrance
Big smiles at the first two. The Mornings with Mum one shows your caring nature.
Susie Clevenger (@wingsobutterfly)
Her head in the “coulds”….I love that. All of your pieces are great!
Polly Robinson
Wow Amers! Impressed! Another form 😉 x
Madeleine Begun Kane
These are all so wonderful — you say so much, so concisely!
oldegg
I laughed out loud to the cat food feed back!
Ella
I have had my head in the coulds, but lately shoulds…
I enjoyed your prompt…cat food, lo
I agree your Lunes rock ;D
Kerry O'Connor
Each of your poems offers the reader a singular experience. I enjoyed these very much.
kaykuala
Wonderful lunes! It’s a whiff of freshness from the usual haiku that we’ve been having! Brilliant call Amy!
Hank
Sara V
Amy, loving your lunes!! Made me laugh out loud with the “feed-back!”
I HAVE A VOICE
Better than Kelly! excellent !
Carol Steel
These are wonderful. I laughed at the second, been there. The first captures what so many of us do to ourselves. The third I undertsand too well. These are well done with twists and humor and truth.