LONELY GIRL
Face of oblique glitter hears
Whispers that he done her wrong
Restless spirit, frozen
Hearing again their sad old song
Shine it all on, lonely girl
You know I’m kin in spirit
Face it now, lonely girl
That song, you know I can hear it
Neither of us had no loving since
January, February, or so
Why not climb off that lonely perch
C’mon – ready, steady, go
We’ll speak of days gone wrong
We’ll snicker at misbegotten men
We’ll hide our eyes from strangers til
We do it all over again
Find others to do us wrong
To keep us stuck in one place
But I’ll remember our big time out
Each time I look at your face
© 2013 Amy Barlow Liberatore/Sharp Little Pencil
Ha! Betcha didn’t know the subject of my poem. It’s
… and yes, we did trip the light mediocre one night eons ago, back when the world was full of vague regrets but more possibilities.
The subject was the moon, courtesy of Izy at Imaginary Garden With Real Toads. Catch: We were not to place the moon in the sky, speak of night or starry night, etc. So I took my girlfriend off her perch and we talked it over. Sure, she’s seen same place, same time, every night, but now she does it by choice, because we got so plotzed on Margaritas, she doesn’t want to come down to earth again. My bad.
This is also “visible” at my poetic lunacy rompfest, Poetic Asides. Amy
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Lisa A.Williams
Really like this one Amy. I’m sure at one time or another we’ve been the lonely girl.
wkkortas
There is a shade of… oh, I don’t know–the Everly Brothers, maybe the Grand Old Opry here, at least in the downright tunefulness of it, but it isn’t victim to schmaltz or stickiness. It’s clean and unencumbered by unnecessary trickery or polysyllabic ledgerdemain, and that is never a bad thing.
Sharp Little Pencil
WKK, as always, an eloquent response. I always appreciate your attention to the details and am so encouraged by your… encouragement! Off to visit you now. Amy
Hannah Gosselin
Ooo…this carries a blues-y tune and spirit to it, Amy! Love it!
Sharp Little Pencil
Blues for this “girl,” yes! Thx, Hannah.
Helen
Hey there lonely girl, my only girl … your poem sends me to another place, another orbit.
Patricia A. McGoldrick
Couldn’t help but wonder how this would sound as a tune! 🙂
grapeling
Uh yep, a country tune. Nice write. Quick question, Amy – in the 2nd to last line, is the first “out” supposed to be “our”?
Sharp Little Pencil
Grapeling (grape being the only flavor of jelly I like), thanks for your sharp little EYES. Corrected the typo. And I’m a copy editor!! Coming to see you now. Amy
margaret
The fourth stanza is golden! Yes, I can here this playin’ in Nashville!
Sharp Little Pencil
Margaret, OK, I’m finally convinced… I must find a guitarist to help me write this one! Thanks, and coming your way now… Amy
Sherry Blue Sky
I love this version of the moon!
Kay, Alberta, Canada
Teeny tiny typo, Amy, sorry, but I think you want to say “remember our big time out” rather than remember out…
HOWever, despite teeny tiny typo, it’s a great song. Yes, I said song. I don’t know what the tune would be, but it would be a winner.
K
Sharp Little Pencil
Kay, yes, too many folks wanted a song that I’m going to write it.
Also, you eye is as sharp as Grapeling’s, and I have made the changes. THANKS. That second (and third) set of eyes truly help me. Coming your way now, Amy
Roger Green
Your girlfriend, BTW, was lovely in the sky last night. I thought of that song Helen did, but then again, yours is its own lovely/lonely thing.
Sharp Little Pencil
Wasn’t she just something? I agree… thanks, Rog! Amy
brian miller
climb off that perch….love your love song to the moon….i can hear its melody….and hey margaritas on top aint bad either….smiles.
Sharp Little Pencil
You picked out all the best stuff of my strut out with the moon…! Amy
claudia
oh i’m all about talking to the moon you know… yes, you know…smiles
whimsygizmo
Oh, man. I can totally hear you singing this, my friend. Awesome.
isadoragruye
I too hear the blues hear, it the loudest, brightest, happiness sense of the term. Love your direction Amy. In reading this I found you developed the relationship of the narrator and the moon so well, that I felt like I eaves dropping on my sisters.
Also, I was quite fond of these lines:
Shine it all on, lonely girl
You know I’m kin in spirit
Face it now, lonely girl
That song, you know I can hear it
that’s right, lady! Viva la!
Sharp Little Pencil
Thanks so much for a lovely comment, Izy. It seems the moon and the blues have always been part of one another… including of course the classic “Blue Moon.” Loved the concept of eavesdropping – so glad you connected with this one! Amy
othermary
Perfect! And this should be set to music. But, maybe you’re already working on that?
Sharp Little Pencil
That’s the rumor! Where’s your URL? Darn.
othermary
http://writinginthebachs.blogspot.com/
Debi Swim
Whispers that he done her wrong
Reminds me of the song in “White Christmas” Love, you didn’t do right by me, by Rosemary Clooney. My favorite line: To send me a Joe who had winter and snow in his heart… wasn’t smart.
I really liked this poem and the reminder of the song!
Sharp Little Pencil
I love that movie and know the song you quote. Yeah, this will be a song at some point! Thanks, Debi. Amy
kaykuala
A beautiful song, Amelita! Somehow reading it brings out the accompanying feel of a great song – the ‘lyrics’ are perfect. The moon had always elicited that sensuous picture of romanticism from earth. Despite the pics of craters and rocks as seen through the various space missions this hadn’t changed. Yes, the song Ma’am! Great!
Hank
Sara v
So very lovely, I would not have guessed, it and love it more for that–bringing her shining face down for a little girl time, love this! 🙂