New York Doll
There was a time in her prime
when she’d mime drink orders
to cordial bartenders who always
tended to her needs. Never one
for thinking while drinking.
She’d haul a Hal to the juke
and dance dance dance
A chance to prance from
Latin to limbo to limo to
blow snow, no dough, only
her willingness to be ill-used
(not abused in the classic sense;
her men’s tastes not leaning toward
the waste of a pretty face)
The pace of the chase
was hasty and tiring, and so,
rewiring back at the flat, we
would recount the bounty
that shines brightest at 2 am
The night, our flight, our fight
to be noticed in an
anonymous
bottomless pit
of a city
© 2014 Amy Barlow Liberatore/Sharp Little Pencil
This is why having a roommate in the larger cities is important. Who else will listen to your triumphs and tragedies ‘til dawn? This one will be at Imaginary Garden With Real Toads on Monday and dverse Poetry Pub’s Open Mic on Tuesday. I’ll add the links in the next two days so you can click and read some soulful stuff from a vast array of poets. Peace, Amy
Polly
I think the internal rhymes here are amazing, Amy – good stuff – I was in NY NY with you 😉
Sharp Little Pencil
God, I wish we had known each other. So many stories from those days, right? Care to swap some? Email me!! Amy
http://vivinfrance.wordpress.com
Wow! Some chick….
Sharp Little Pencil
And I was just getting warmed up… ha ha ha.
brian miller
to be noticed in an anonymous pit….that is the crux isnt it…
really a great write amy…i like the honesty….the internal rhyme just makes this sing….
Sharp Little Pencil
Brian, thanks so much. And yes, it’s all about being noticed, no matter whether it’s show business or teaching or waiting tables. No one moves to NYC to NOT be noticed, except of course witness protection programmers…! Amy
kimnelsonwrites
Talent. Shines through every internally rhymed line in this poem that tells a very real tale. So good, Amy. So good.
Sharp Little Pencil
Kim, thank you so much. From time to time, the internal rhyme rings….sublime! (wink) Amy
El Guapo
Your pacing has the frantic feel of a Thursday night clubbing in Manhattan
Is it bad I smiled through most of this?
Sharp Little Pencil
Hell, no, Guap! I would expect nothing less from you than a wide grin! Thanks for stopping by, buddy. Amy
Sherry Blue Sky
You paint her clearly. I relate to “the willingness to be ill-used” in one’s younger years. Thankfully, this completely changes with time!
Sharp Little Pencil
You picked up on the part I found hardest to write, but felt at the pit of my stomach. It was like that for so many women in my youth, as well as some gay men friends. The sunglasses in the morning, ugh. Thanks, hon. Amy
Sarav
Amy, you are a brilliant spinner of verse and stories, put just the right seasoning of frantic into this too 🙂 Excellent!
Sharp Little Pencil
Sara, I love this comment, “just the right seasoning of frantic.” That is a BRILL sentiment! Use it in a poem, and soon! THanks so much for the kind words… Amy
kaykuala
Being in a big city one is inclined to be on one’s own. One is lonely despite the bigger number of people around. A room-mate is essential to maintain semblance of relationship.with others. Very true Amelita!
Hank
Sharp Little Pencil
I always had roommates, or roommates had me! Funny, I feel my best for writing when I’m alone in a crowd, but at home, yes, company always. Thanks, Hank, and make sure you check out Guapo’s fundraising mention for his friend… Amelita
ihatepoetry
Excellent, babe. I loved that line about the bounty that shines brightest at 2am. Exquisite. Thought this was about my favorite rock and roll band, though. Love, Mosk
see link
Sharp Little Pencil
Ha ha, Mosk, I thought of that, too, which only cracks me up more! It’s all in the title, which of course came to me after writing the poem. You got it, hon. Amy
leesis
I was singing it in my head as I read it without realising :). Not just New York…I recognised woman I’ve known. What I love about your poetry Amy as usual is you do some magical mix that takes me emotionally ‘there’. I smiled but also felt grief for her. Geez I love your writing!
Sarav
Amy, thank you so much for your comment on my poem “When Three’s Not the Charm.” You made my day. I was telling my husband that you totally “get” me. That means so much–had my hand over my heart just thinking of you 🙂 Hugs!
purplepeninportland
This ROCKS!
Lindy Lee
Rhyming within is a tricky ability not granted to many. As for New York, I remain a fan of that fantastic place…
Bodhirose
I like that this doll stayed just on the edge of not falling all the way over it! Hauling a Hal…snow blow, no dough…ill used but not abused…great piece, Amy.
wkkortas
The word play is clever and Elvis Costello-esque, and the pace is dance-beat perfect. This is really fine stuff.